I just wanted to let everyone know, I have uploaded a new story. If you would like to read it, you should go here.
Story time
Blog / Sunday, November 15th, 2009
I just wanted to let everyone know, I have uploaded a new story. If you would like to read it, you should go here.
I enjoyed this story. I liked how real it was, being personal. I cannot say, though, that I am a fan of the beginning: it’s too…”fact-fact-fact.” That’s the best I can describe it. I don’t think you don’t do the rest of the story justice with the opening you used.
Wow. I should revise my comments before I post them…The last sentence should be: I don’t think you *do*…etc. I apologize if there was any confusion.
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Thanks Amy, I will keep this in mind. I think I am going to revise this one for my final portfolio.